Peer review of first practical development of idea

comment on the initial relationship between the theme and the proposed subject

strengths:

very clear link between theme and subject have identified specific lenses for your research (empathy!)

the link between the tow makes a lot of sense. very clear. it’s a interesting way to look at it.

comment on the appropriateness, scope and ambition of the proposed outcomes in relation to the subject

strengths

you have considered various contexts for your illustrations (which are relevant)

links well to the subject and well to your style/practice

suggestions

why not do/propose all three? they are all fairly similar and would make a great awareness campaign

would a book need more exploration of the image/narratives ?

you’ve got to think what you want from it. if it’s a persuasive tool, appealing to people empathy to organ donation then maybe in an exhibition isn’t the right place?

book and poster are both good ideas.

comment on the visual investigation and development of ideas in response them and subject?

strengths

relevant to the people you’ve interviewed

good play with technique so far

sounds like a strong idea and I know this will work well with your style.

suggestions

something about the illustrations feel a little cold (white space?) –perhaps you could try and bring some happiness/warmth to them? (like them smiling?)

are they just single portraits photos?

consider how their expressions will make people feel empathy. is there an emotion you are after? What’s the message?

comment on the choice of media/format/series in relation to the outcome

great potential for this to work in multiply format. don’t get too bogged down in the outcome though, - focus on trying to communicate the persons story/feelings.

strengths

I like the negative shape/space idea. just think about how you vsn get beople to feel empathy! your detail illustration will work well to capture expression.

Suggestions

your usual method will work well. are you trying collage areas?

General comments

Reminds me of Rankins ‘alive in the face of death’ project – check out the documentary, it was on the bbc.

I think it would be good to look at more than one persons story – show how organ donors can change so many lives.

keep playing with media and layout of quotes to see what communicates that persons feelings the best.

try without the quotes but it might be what you need to help with the message. it might be a nice addition anyways. try both!

do more visual investigation of technique, doesn’t necessarily have to be the right image or composition  - to play!

-       organs

-       hospitals

-       hospital equipment

document contextual reference and how this has influenced me.