essay feedback

4200 words - essay will need to be edited down or will be penalised according to the college regulations.

13% similarity mainly due to issues with citation.

This has the beginnings of a very good essay, certainly you have evidenced a very good degree of contextual research. However, the essay is mainly contextual at the moment, but not analytical. Perhaps you could include more visual analysis of awareness raising campaigns.(after talking to richard about  primary research i have now collected from individual homeless people, and my practical idea to visually communicate that persons life, he suggested i could raise awareness of this further in my essay and as well as or instead of a campaign)  :-

• first half of essay to focus on stats, causes, social effects -general summary.
• 2nd half- more lengthy discussion of a individual case study or campaign which backs up first section. 'another example of writer x in first section...'

Don't use subheadings or bullet points.

try to summarise bullets pointed areas- can add the remaining info to appendix as this doesn't get included in word count.

The title needs to ask a question, which the conclusion should answer. e.g how are negative perceptions of homelessness created in society?. ..